Saturday, May 21, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday #7: Redefining "Closed Campus"

This week, I return to my Young Adult Urban Fantasy WIP, Osland. After a series of strange events, the protagonist, Gail Dorjee, is convinced that her boarding school, Osland Academy, is a about a lot more than preparing kids for college. When she asks to leave the school grounds to go sight-seeing in Seattle, her dorm manager forbids it, but she decides to sneak out anyway.


The moment of truth comes as she works her way through some trees toward a wall at the edge of the school grounds:


I reached out and pressed my palm against the brick. A fog clouded my mind. After I stepped back, I shook my head in a feeble attempt to clear it, but I couldn’t even remember why I’d even wanted to touch the wall. A little bit of concentration cleared out the mental mist, and my purpose resurfaced. I eyed the wall.

“Now, that is just not right,” I murmured.


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23 comments:

writeintention said...

Just not right...love the phrase..love the six.

Lisa said...

Intriguing!!

Gem Sivad said...

I like her ability to touch and discern the "just not right." Great six.

Cate Masters said...

Very cool. Now I want to see what's beyond the wall too!

Chrystalla Thoma said...

You bet that's not right! Very intriguing!

sue said...

Oh I like that - maybe it's a school for vampire children? (oh sorry that's one of mine) couldn't resist - good snippet

Marie Dees said...

Oh, interesting. What's not right? I wanna know!

Felicia said...

Wonder what's going to happen next...

AllureVanSanz said...

Ending on a hook...you're such a tease!

But I dig that. ::grins:: Good six.

Best,
Allure

Jessica Subject said...

I want to know what' "not right". Very intriguing!

Marion Sipe said...

Oh, mysterious! I like it!

Susanna Fraser said...

Interesting stuff--makes me wonder what she'll discover next.

Lindsay said...

Love the building of the suspense

Sarah Grimm said...

Ooh, I want to know more! Great job!

Lauri J Owen said...

Great six! Sounds like a great book! I think you missed a word here, tho: "I shook my head in a feeble [word?] to clear it, . ."

J.A. Beard said...

That's what last minute editing gets you!

Yeah, it should be a 'feeble attempt'. :)

Verna Clay said...

I want to know what's not right. What kind of school is this?

Taryn Kincaid said...

Intriguing.

Jean Davis said...

Now I want to know what is hidden behind the wall. Great six!

Pippa Jay said...

In-ter-rest-ting. :)

Jayel Kaye said...

Can't wait to find out what's up wiht the wall.

Hailey Edwards said...

Curious six you've given us. I'm wondering if the wall is cloaked? Magic to muddy the mind. That sort of thing.

J.A. Beard said...

Just for the record, the school is, allegedly, just a Seattle boarding school with a bit of an 'elite' reputation. :)