Saturday, May 21, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday #7: Redefining "Closed Campus"

This week, I return to my Young Adult Urban Fantasy WIP, Osland. After a series of strange events, the protagonist, Gail Dorjee, is convinced that her boarding school, Osland Academy, is a about a lot more than preparing kids for college. When she asks to leave the school grounds to go sight-seeing in Seattle, her dorm manager forbids it, but she decides to sneak out anyway.


The moment of truth comes as she works her way through some trees toward a wall at the edge of the school grounds:


I reached out and pressed my palm against the brick. A fog clouded my mind. After I stepped back, I shook my head in a feeble attempt to clear it, but I couldn’t even remember why I’d even wanted to touch the wall. A little bit of concentration cleared out the mental mist, and my purpose resurfaced. I eyed the wall.

“Now, that is just not right,” I murmured.


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23 comments:

  1. AnonymousMay 22, 2011 at 2:46 AM

    Just not right...love the phrase..love the six.

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  2. Elisa DaneMay 22, 2011 at 6:05 AM

    Intriguing!!

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  3. Gem SivadMay 22, 2011 at 6:47 AM

    I like her ability to touch and discern the "just not right." Great six.

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  4. Cate MastersMay 22, 2011 at 8:36 AM

    Very cool. Now I want to see what's beyond the wall too!

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  5. Chrystalla ThomaMay 22, 2011 at 8:39 AM

    You bet that's not right! Very intriguing!

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  6. sueMay 22, 2011 at 8:55 AM

    Oh I like that - maybe it's a school for vampire children? (oh sorry that's one of mine) couldn't resist - good snippet

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  7. Marie DeesMay 22, 2011 at 11:37 AM

    Oh, interesting. What's not right? I wanna know!

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  8. Felicia RogersMay 22, 2011 at 12:00 PM

    Wonder what's going to happen next...

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  9. AllureVanSanzMay 22, 2011 at 12:40 PM

    Ending on a hook...you're such a tease!

    But I dig that. ::grins:: Good six.

    Best,
    Allure

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  10. Jessica E. SubjectMay 22, 2011 at 1:22 PM

    I want to know what' "not right". Very intriguing!

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  11. Marion SipeMay 22, 2011 at 1:36 PM

    Oh, mysterious! I like it!

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  12. Susanna FraserMay 22, 2011 at 1:48 PM

    Interesting stuff--makes me wonder what she'll discover next.

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  13. LindsayMay 22, 2011 at 2:59 PM

    Love the building of the suspense

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  14. Sarah GrimmMay 22, 2011 at 3:18 PM

    Ooh, I want to know more! Great job!

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  15. Lauri J OwenMay 22, 2011 at 10:00 PM

    Great six! Sounds like a great book! I think you missed a word here, tho: "I shook my head in a feeble [word?] to clear it, . ."

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  16. J.A. BeardMay 22, 2011 at 10:14 PM

    That's what last minute editing gets you!

    Yeah, it should be a 'feeble attempt'. :)

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  17. Verna ClayMay 22, 2011 at 11:31 PM

    I want to know what's not right. What kind of school is this?

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  18. Taryn KincaidMay 23, 2011 at 4:20 AM

    Intriguing.

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  19. Jean DavisMay 23, 2011 at 4:42 AM

    Now I want to know what is hidden behind the wall. Great six!

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  20. Pippa JayMay 23, 2011 at 4:58 AM

    In-ter-rest-ting. :)

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  21. Jayel KayeMay 23, 2011 at 6:03 AM

    Can't wait to find out what's up wiht the wall.

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  22. Hailey EdwardsMay 23, 2011 at 11:21 AM

    Curious six you've given us. I'm wondering if the wall is cloaked? Magic to muddy the mind. That sort of thing.

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  23. J.A. BeardMay 23, 2011 at 12:25 PM

    Just for the record, the school is, allegedly, just a Seattle boarding school with a bit of an 'elite' reputation. :)

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